From: artn
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Date: 11/01/2026 |
Hello! I hope that a comment dropped on a story written in 2004 isn't unwelcome, but I just read all three chapters and my heart broke at the end of the third. What a well crafted story! I loved the pithiness and levity of the dialogue - some parts were just brilliant, such as the coconut -, the depth and simplicity of the plot, and the seamless way you wove different strands into one tapestry, and went from light adventure to beautiful heartbreak at the end. This paragraph just really shattered me (in the best way):
"It's only an ocean away," Jack said. "And you know, as well as I do, that you have to. It's the cost." He rested his forehead against mine. "The Caribbean's a part of you. I know it is. You can't lose that just because you leave. It will always be here. So go. Make us proud. Marry a good woman. Name your first son Jack."
I loved it. I am very sad.
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From: xpityx
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Date: 09/04/2017 |
I've been in fandom for 19 years and I'd never come across Squidge until I fell into the Sparrington fandom. Now I'm worried that I've been missing out on other fanfic as beautifully written as yours. Honestly, I had to pause every so often just to admire a turn of phrase or the way your wrote your characters - the whole thing was phenomenal, thank you so much for sharing it (...I promise to write something a bit more coherent when I read this again)
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From: Sly Hostetter
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Date: 10/24/2009 |
OK, that was painfully beautiful! Wonderfully done, though.
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From: jewel
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Date: 09/22/2008 |
your story was THE BEST EVER!!!! I love it
The ending was so friking heartbreaking!!
If I coud ask you something...did the love each other??
That's for the wonderful story hun
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From: virginie
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Date: 09/03/2008 |
What a gorgeous story. Your prose style is so elegant and visceral, so understated and rich, all at once.
And the ending is utterly perfect and heartbreaking.
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